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The sea

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Prissilla watched as the waves ebbed and flowed.

In and out, in and out.

It’s melody calling out to her.

Heeding it’s call, she rose slowly and made her way into the surf.

The waves lapped around her ankles like a greedy puppy, she felt welcomed somehow.

She pushed in deeper until the water was just below her armpits and she relaxed and allowed the salt in the water to push her up into a float.

Her enormous belly no longer felt as heavy as a pumpkin, it simply bobbed and weaved merging with ocean.

With each ripple of the water she felt  her pain, her sorrow, her loss, the feelings of abandonment that she just couldn’t shake, her  anxiety for the future and most of all the missing seep into water and she felt at peace.

As if on cue, the little being inside of her kicked, in what she always hoped was pleasure. They at least had this in common she thought, a love for the sea.

She would miss this time most of all she thought, it is pity she couldn’t figure out a way to keep him or her.

For now though, she would enjoy their time together immersed in the magical, always forgiving salt water and think only of her beloved Pierre.

Joining in on this week’s writing prompt ‘Salt water’

“The cure for anything is salt water….sweat, tears or the sea.”
~ Isak Dinesen, pseudonym of Baroness Karen von Blixen-Finecke

For your Creative Non-Fiction tell us about the last time that one of these three things “cured” you. If you are going with Fiction, have your character resolve a problem using one of the three (or all three!!!).

I chose to do fiction for this prompt.  The character Prissilla is from my attempt at the NANOWRIMO challenge. I actually stopped right at the point in my novel attempt and giggled when I saw the prompt because instantly I knew what to write even though it alluded me so many weeks ago.

Hope it answers the prompt. Please feel free to comment and critique.

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Author: kidfriendlyja

Exploring all activities Jamaican that our children would enjoy!

11 thoughts on “The sea

  1. Love that bonding moment, even though it’s brief. Nicely bittersweet.

  2. GAH! I was bobbing along next to her, completely immersed with the writing, and then was dunked under when I discovered she was giving the baby up. …! What a twist ::sigh:: You made the ocean so inviting, nicely done.

  3. Oh, how sad! I’d love to know more about the story here. I’m glad that whatever’s going on, she has this one bit of peace and joy!

  4. I’d like to know more about the character, and her beloved Pierre.

    You’ve done a great job capturing that moment of buoyancy-great descriptions throughout the piece!

  5. Really great at creating the sea and the joy of swimming. I totally want more.

  6. This is sad, but also so sweet and touching. I really liked how you described the way the water made her feel lighter – I think even someone who has never been pregnant could imagine the relief she feels.

  7. I felt as if I were floating in the sea with your character! Beautiful, bittersweet piece. I would like to read more of this character!

  8. Great juxtaposition of being soothed by the water in the face of what was to come. It made a very powerful combination.

  9. Several other commenters have used the word “bittersweet” and it is SO fitting. Such a lovely moment enjoying the sea with her unborn child then the realization she won’t be able to keep the baby.

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